Descriptive Language

Descriptive Language

One Thing

Opening

Complete the following sentence.

  • One thing I want my readers to understand about [my character] is __, and I intend to show this by __.

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Share your responses with your classmates.

Active Verbs and Descriptive Language

Work Time

Writers are often encouraged to “show, don’t tell” their audiences the conflicts, emotions, and lessons in their work. There are many ways to use language to accomplish this goal.

Take some time to review Active Verbs and Descriptive Language with your teacher.

Then, analyze the college essay, “The Aviator,” using these annotation protocols.

  • Underline uses of the verb “to be” and consider if there is a stronger way to convey the same meaning.
  • Indicate examples of active verbs.
  • Indicate examples of descriptive language.
  • Mark the end of each sentence with slashes (/). Look at the sentence length, is it varied? What thoughts or ideas are emphasized due to sentences that “pop” or stand out? What kind of mood does the sentence structure create?
  • Write a note explaining what you think the message of this essay is.

College Admissions Essays

Work Time

Today, as in Lesson 3, you will have the opportunity to choose the Independent Reading you would like to work with—at this point, one of the College Admissions Essays you read through for homework.

  • Look back through the essays you read, and choose which essay you would like to work with.

College Admissions Essay Analysis

Work Time

With your Independent Reading group, go through the college admissions essay you selected. Look for examples of active verbs and strong, descriptive language; what do these examples show you about what the writer is trying to communicate?

  • Underline uses of the verb “to be” and consider if there is a stronger way to convey the same meaning.
  • Indicate examples of active verbs.
  • Indicate examples of descriptive language.
  • Mark the end of each sentence with slashes (/). Look at the sentence length: is it varied? What thoughts or ideas are emphasized due to sentences that “pop” or stand out? What kind of mood does the sentence structure create?
  • Write a note explaining what you think the message of this essay is.

Then, share what you see as the strongest examples of descriptive language and active verbs with your classmates. What do you notice about the examples your classmates shared?

Your Character Narrative

Work Time

Now, think about Your Character Narrative.

  • Draft a section of Your Character Narrative. (This does not need to be the introduction; it could be a section from the middle of the narrative.) Try to use descriptive language and strong, active verbs.

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Gallery: Planning Options

Work Time

Descriptive Language and Active Verbs

Closing

Looking through what you wrote, mark your most descriptive language and your strongest active verbs.

  • Share your favorite phrase or sentence from your draft.

Your Character Narrative

Homework

In the next lesson, you will revise the introduction and conclusion of your narrative.

  • Make sure you have completed the Planning Options and have finished a rough draft of your narrative before then.

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Homework