Narrative Essay Group Feedback

Narrative Essay Group Feedback



In today’s lesson, you will be working with a writing group to critique the rough drafts of your narratives. It will be important to be constructive and fair in your responses.

  • Jot down a few notes or thoughts about what that looks like in a writing group, so your class can discuss and set expectations together.

Open Notebook

Discuss your thoughts with your classmates.

Introductions and Conclusions

Work Time

In a personal narrative, the beginning and ending set the tone for the essay and help your reader know what to focus on. Today, you’ll take some time to think about what makes a strong introduction and conclusion.

  • Review Introductions and Conclusions with your teacher.

Narrative Writing Rubric

Work Time

It’s important to know how your work will be evaluated.

  • Take some time to review the Grade 12 Narrative Writing Rubric with your teacher.

You’ll use this as a framework when looking at your classmates’ essays and when revising your own.

Peer Response Groups, Step 1

Work Time

Meet with your group. Share your narrative electronically with all members of your group. Then, take turns reading your work aloud, with group members following. There are two steps in the peer revision process. Repeat both steps for everyone in your group.

In step 1 of your peer revision process, for each work shared, the readers should split up the following tasks. You may be responsible for more than one.

  • Identify anything that shows a developing conflict or resolution to the conflict.
  • Identify details that use strong, descriptive language.
  • Identify examples of strong, active verbs.
  • Identify places where you see the speaker’s struggles.
  • Identify places where you see the speaker’s growth.

Peer Response Groups, Step 2

Work Time

In step 2 of the peer revision process, answer the following questions as a group for each narrative.

  • What is the central conflict in the narrative? Is it internal, external, or both? How is the conflict resolved?
  • What weaknesses does the narrator show about him- or herself?
  • Does the narrator have moments of growth, change, or realization that portray him or her in a positive light? If so, what are they? And if not, what is the reader’s ultimate impression of the narrator?
  • What is the overall lesson or message that you see coming through in this work?
  • What would you like to learn more about? Are there characters, events, or descriptions that you feel could be enhanced?
  • Was there anything confusing? What needs to be cleared up?
  • Is the reader’s impression of the narrator the same as the narrator’s impression of him- or herself? Should it be? If not, what causes the difference? What does the reader understand about the narrator that the narrator doesn’t see?
  • Does the introduction set the scene and help portray a problem or conflict that needs to be addressed?
  • Does the conclusion contain a reflection that adds to the reader’s understanding and generates further thought?

Three Things


Complete a Quick Write.

  • Taking your group’s feedback into account, list three things you plan to change between this draft and your final draft.

Share this with your teacher.

Your Character Narrative


Time to revise Your Character Narrative.

  • Begin your revision.

You will have one lesson to work on this draft in class before the final round of peer edits, so be sure to plan your time accordingly.