Vivid Language

Seeing Not Judging


Action is easier to “see” in writing than a summary of action or a judgment of feelings. For example, if the narrator tells you that the character is happy, you understand what “happy” means, but you don’t know from the description whether the character is quietly smiling, or jumping up and down, or whistling a tune. The narrator has made a judgment and passed that off as description.

In order to make your writing more vivid, always take the opportunity to see for your readers. Think about it from their perspective. Try to avoidjudging , or drawing conclusions from what you see.

  • Practice effective description as you complete Description: Seeing Not Judging.

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