Vivid Language

Vivid Language

Seeing Not Judging


Action is easier to “see” in writing than a summary of action or a judgment of feelings. For example, if the narrator tells you that the character is happy, you understand what “happy” means, but you don’t know from the description whether the character is quietly smiling, or jumping up and down, or whistling a tune. The narrator has made a judgment and passed that off as description.

In order to make your writing more vivid, always take the opportunity to see for your readers. Think about it from their perspective. Try to avoidjudging , or drawing conclusions from what you see.

  • Practice effective description as you complete Description: Seeing Not Judging.

Open Notebook

When directed, share your responses to the exercise.

Effective Verbs and Good Writing

Work Time

Simply naming an action is generally not the best way to describe it for your reader. Join a partner as directed and do the following.

  • Practice using more vivid verbs as you complete Description: Effective Verbs.

Open Notebook

Share your responses to the second exercise with your partner. When directed, share your responses with the whole class.

Vignette Peer Editing

Work Time

Listen as your teacher reviews the peer editing form and offers additional suggestions. Then share your vignette with your partner and offer feedback.

  • Read your partner’s vignette, and then fill out the peer editing form as directed.
  • When you have finished, share your feedback with your partner. Listen as your partner provides any additional response.
  • Spend a few additional moments with your partner, making sure he or she has understood all of your feedback.

Book II, Chapters 21 and 22