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In your workshop pair, read your partner’s introduction and first body paragraph while he or she reads yours.

Consider the elements of a strong introduction:

  • A smooth introduction to the topic—not a cheesy hook or a bland, general statement.
  • An appropriate level of formality.
  • A thesis that is specific, challenging, and based on evidence the paper will provide and analyze.

Consider the elements of a strong body paragraph:

  • The topic sentence acts as a mini-thesis that states the goal of the paragraph.
  • The topic sentence acts as a connection between the main thesis and the claims of the paragraph.
  • Evidence is blended elegantly with a sentence that makes its purpose clear.
  • The claims of the paragraph are clearly based on the evidence, using a valid line of reasoning that your reader can follow.
  • After you read your partner’s introduction and body paragraph, give your partner positive feedback about the specific ways his or her writing is meeting these goals. Share your notes with your partner.

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